Well, first off, be VERY certain about your entry when posting to
Yahoo, as if they don't like your entry, you don NOT get a refund
on your submission price.
Next, is to giive the benefits to your readers. The way your
entry is worded now, it all comes from you. ("We have..." "...who
have..."). Write it to answer the question "What is in it for
me?" with "me" being the reader.
One more suggestion: take out the mention of the "website" as of
course it will be a website, that is given.
Hope this helps!
>Re. yahoo suggest a site. We haven't yet submitted our site. We
>are unsure whether or not to put anything in the ADDITIONAL
>INFORMATION Will it help us to leave it blank or what?? We have
>a suitable 15 word description.
>We were going to put the following. What do you think?
>"Kernow Cottages is a website designed by a family from Cornwall
>in the U.K. who have inland and harbour holiday cottages to let.
>We have included many dozens of links to the attractions of the
>county, plus ancient, Celtic, and modern Cornish history